I:
the smooth polish
of red and brown and ochre
inexperienced lush hues
of a great orange wide-armed
autumn;
- not quite managing to melt
subtly
into
the unforgiving background
taut and smooth
like the sound.
II.
his smiles are a
shape,
just like any other but his
curl and multiply
and change colour so
if you stood among them
you would be
drenched;
in the rich heavy hues
of oils
slick upon the canvas
sweet and
heavy.
the carmine rust and jade
green livid
upon the metaphorical portrait
of
the man
with
the trumpet.
III;
his words are
spoken by a voice; no less
and
his laughter generated
by a vibrating membrane.
nonetheless
it is strung with gold
no
less
in the laughable earnestness
of his humour.
; pitched upon a string taut
with the nasal vibrations from a
normal functioning body a
collection of cells operated by
brain matter
and nervous chains of communication stringing
down
his back and racing to all extremities and
nervous endings nevertheless I
hear
the tiny beads rattling back and forth
upon this string like
the golden drip of maple syrup in p e rfect
juxtaposition
with the leprechaun gold of
salted butter.
4. and we stood around making shapes with our mouths.
so that I did not know
what to say.
his absence
leaves streaks of distaste in oil leaks
down my neck absorbed into the intestines
for me
to mull over.
his presence invokes
spirals of butterflies blue-black-wh i t e
a n d
c
a
r
m
i
n
e
down
the well-trod forest path.
and scorn the sunshine which
lights their backs with the
brilliant gloss of parquet
and the dark wood eyelets
on
their wings suddenly leap
out with a startling iridescence
sudden smug shiver of velvet
retreating with
alarming certainty
into my mouth and
blinded eyes
and
even the soft thud of wingbeats
fade;
as they beat
out my existence.
Fifth-
Sounds should be
made of shrieks long-sharp --
bright-orange-\shouts sleek soft
in solitude,
green-- knife-edges cuts filled with vividred blood-
-
--like idle reputationswith sweetvivacity screaming
like nailsonachalkboard shreds of paper andflesh
too fast pullingscratchingmewl i ng and
indigo to that effect where we
pull, like
emotionsofwineandsorrow
think tomo r r o w w i l l
t
a
k
e
f
l
i
g
h
t
like all relaxed conversations and unspokenwords thoughts
twanging of
tensionunreleased and
longvivacious streaks of aqua drops of vinegar
and unshed blood
sound; Music
should be like
sweet-andsalty eel sauce
onmytongue
should be
abrasions of lime. on my tongue
6th=
the understatement underlining
the sweep of his hand.
A movement to set off
the vast
infinities of opal
set in a universe
set in a patch of
dark;
set in an ir r e g ularity
set in white
on close inspection
set in satin and orangeyellow
set in
safe blue
again;
to settle back to
his arm.
he
sits
he stands he
slouches curlsup lies down crosses his legs
arms
the line of his neck
curving artistry in his back
a new line of thought in
every fold in his clothing.
the spring of muscle
lie in contrast
with the curl
of relaxation-
the beckon of barely listenable harmonies
all
I ever heard. straining against
the whinny of the solo
harmonized to the point where one
hears it not,
if one knows it not;
the horizontal line of his bow
as it rests in his
lap.
the deceptive
smooth sheer
[the sly whip and curl]youare beautiful! I shouted at his unhearing
movement of it keening back inmyhead metaphorically
against the rasp and but literally
swirl you are beautiful.
of pyrotechnics
the dark secret watching I
half-brazenly put into practice
as
I blend
into dull monotone.
surely he would not notice.
the stroke
of his
ridiculously unfeminine
large, fleshed-out
strong-looking
unlong hands
particularly unsuited to
the role of beloved stereotypically worthyofworship
on the wood he holds carefully
believably for such hands
untapered and bereft of all romantic delusions
holding onto the smooth polish of redbrownochre hues
of inexperienced wide-armed autumndays.
Surely they are nice hands.














Comments
Jia.
My self esteem is on the ground, and dissolving fast.
woooooooooooooooooowwwwwwww.....
boo.
--
-cinderryyy cinderrsss...
.. YOU'RE NOT TRYING.
Jia.
Jia.
... no...
Jia.
Yeah, yeah, gloat!
Jia.
Now, maybe, if this isn't a lover, it ought to be. The words spill forth like heart beats and breath to my mind, during intimate moments. Everything is sharper during ... well, I don't know if it is or not because for us the intimate moments just fog the world away. *lol* But Love makes all more vibrant, and there must be something in love here.
The only piece I have difficulty with is the part where you're shouting at his back. It's not what it says that I find difficult; that I understand completely. It's only where it falls that I can't get. As to everything else, vibrantly, wholesomely, beautiful.
Zebra did all of us a favor, getting you to put this out solid. Congratulations on being featured in the March UA.
k
--
Be yourself. Just be. That is all you need to do to impress me.
Bless,
k
I actually read this hours ago, but I couldn't think of a reponse to this and went around all afternoon having a warm feeling in my pit like a little snake. ; _ ; And it does contribute so much, the fact that you know it's a lover, that you know exactly what I'm talking about. Thank you even more, for that fact. It's even better than anyone who's close to me, that you can read this and know without half an hour's explanation in advance. Well, I guess it's darn obvious
Mm! You've actually drawn my attention to the part I hate most, or part six. The beginning of it... I had a discussion withzebrapowerofthree about it, but I still don't like it. That set part. I screwed it up bad @ )@ Haha... about the part you brought up though, yeah, I get what you're talking about
Um! I know this is the third time, but THANK YOU! Again and again! AGAIN! Thank you! It really means so much, because although you see me putting alot of literary work on dA, but I'm actually pretty shy about it, because I'm really pretty scared of what people say. I get alot of bad rap, and to have one of the writers I respect most in dA actually read through a piece that lies so close to my heart, then FEATURE it of all things, then have someone like YOU make a wonderfulwonderfulwonderful comment like this just... really made me cry. Which is rare! Don't get me wrong...
Thank you!
Jia.
k
--
Be yourself. Just be. That is all you need to do to impress me.
Bless,
k
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